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Across my thigh today,
I scrawled a word.
In pink marker,
A four-letter word.


Early today was found,
An unidentified victim,
A brunette teenage female,
A suspected case of suicide.

No cause of death apparent,
No exit wounds or bullet holes,
No slash\'n\'dash or hit and run,
Requires further examination.

They pulled away her clothes,
And off white undergarments.
They opened up her stomach,
And examined what lay within.

They weighed and measured .
They drew blood and tested.
Trying to unravel the mysteries of,
Their brown haired green-eyed Jane Doe.

\"Victim Jane Doe 226,
Recent scars visible on,
Arms breasts and abdomen.
The stomach contains,
Large amounts of an alcohol,
And several undigested pills.
The bladder is ruptured,
Suggesting excessive drinking.
The liver was bleeding internally,
Most likely from the consumption,
Of too many assorted pharmaceuticals.
Most probable cause of death-
Suicide. By means of overdose...\"

A tired pathology technician ,
Bent down to take a closer look,
\"...Oh well what have we here?\"

And then they knew.

Because she branded herself,
The day before.
A four-letter word,
Scrawled across her thighs.
In a vibrant neon pink.

They turned to each other,
And nodded in comprehension.
Case closed, time to go home,
And began to take off their gloves.

One of them rewound the Dictaphone,
And began to record again.
\"Victim Jane Doe 226,
Cause of death is obvious.
A victim to the virus,
Insecurity, paranoia.
A textbook case,
Of self-loathing.\"

Then they covered up the body,
With a non-descript white sheet.
And then they wheeled the trolley,
Into freezer space 226.
©2003-2009 ~greendragon
:icongreendragon:

Author's Comments

this is a little weird. when i wrote this i though it was terribly obscure. i didnt think anyone could possibly make head nor tails of it as the situation it was based on, i personally didnt even understand, however. when i asked a few close friends what they thought the 'word' was at the end, the answer that they gave reflected a very prominant part of their personality. however no one as of yet has gotten what i see the word as.

what do you think it is?

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:iconneographixx:
Very nice. I think the word is "hate". +fav

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:icongorsky:
i think your poem is really good...it makes one think...It made me think. it is weird how at the end...the "technicians", doctors, whatever- "comprehend"... i can only think of rape, or love, or fear even..?
what is the word you thought of when you wrote the poem?..would you tell?

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:iconaffirmation:
This is pure genius. I'd be insane not to fav this.

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Oh show me the way to the next whiskey bar, oh don't ask why. Oh, don't ask why.
:iconjaggy:
The word is "Lost".
Your writing owns, if I've never told you that before.

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Give me convenience or give me death
:iconjaggy:
oh, no- I read it again and changed my mind. "Hurt"

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Give me convenience or give me death
:iconchristiana:
"life"??
will u ever unravel the secret?? this is a great great poem. u have skill. lucky i saw u on ~affirmation's page and decided to check u out. this is great. definately +fav
oh and can u note me with what the word really is? unless it really isnt and can be changed from person to person.
chrissy

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:iconwernstrum:
nice poem. i agree with neographixx. i think the word is hate

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Waste not want not
-- The Mask
:iconevilfaeries:
*Dead*
?

I have to know. What was it? hehe. Anyways, just curious. Cause yeah she felt dead inside i bet.. oooh yeah, the others are right, hate. self loathing. wow. this was good.

~kandice

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` you can leave me on the corner where you found me,
i'm not for sale anymore.
:iconendofdayz:
I thought, at first, the word was Hate. However, Kurt Cobain, another suicide tells me otherwise. How about "Pain"? I got that from the end of "You Know You're Right" by Nirvana. The last word CObain ever said through his music was "Pain".

Amazing. +fav

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