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a little black fly by ~greendragon:icongreendragon:





A little black fly,
with bulbous black eyes,
landed on a brick wall.

it looked around,
through a multitude of screens,
then he settled down and thought .

he wondered at the size of the world,
and at this smoke which burns his eyes.
he tried to comprehend the nature of,
these enormous speeding insects,
that nurish him not.
he tried to understand the purpose of,
these looming cold mazes,
that feel the joy and pain of nature not.
he watched large soft fleshy creatures,
in their millions walk about.
he pondered the morals of their right,
to give or to take his life.,

and he wondered why only they are different
and set apart from what he knows as \'us\'.
he marveled at their numbers,
and their fearlessness and pride.
most of all he wondered why,
out of all of \'us\' only they,
give back to the mother not.

then he puzzled out complicated equations,
which planned his path of flight.
©2003-2009 ~greendragon
:icongreendragon:

Author's Comments

i really really like this. i had the flies thoughts more arranged and ordered, but then i tried to change it to how they fly, short, spurting. with lots of tangents. im not sure if it worked. but im quite fond of this

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:iconnoirin:
a weird one, sorta makes you think of how a little kid would look at the world
:iconcomoda:
Clap bravo! :D (Big Grin) seirously, I really like this poam. gj Thumbs Up
:iconkwazo:
wierd bizzare odd nice!
good work again!
:iconjaggy:
wonderful. I love how you can empathise with a fly. That takes skill. "but then i tried to change it to how they fly, short, spurting. with lots of tangents. " - stroke of genius as far as I'm concerned.
I don't like to kill flys, or spiders or ants or anything. I never thought that I had a greater right to live than them. I like your gentle rhyminy and the good rhythm which is always present in your work. Nice job.

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:iconornjelibn:
I'm sure you've captured the thought-process of a fly very well. :D (Big Grin) Very interesting and unique writing. I thoroughly enjoyed delving into the world of a fly! :) (Smile)

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:iconendofdayz:
Oh, man, wow! I'm reccommending this as a DD to ^keen and ^faithwalker. This is amazing! The fly really seems to know what's going on, better than any of us. Just today I led a fly out of my house instead of killing it, makes me happy now, that I did so :) (Smile) ! I'm surely adding this to my favs!

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:iconkarmacursed:
A very nice poem. I've never actually thought of a fly having that perspective. It kind of makes me paranoid about what they are thinking while buzzing around my head on occasions.

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