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Struming on a street corner,
Plucking a pattern of notes,
Electrified and synchronised,
Briefly housed then amplified.
Sorted selected then escaped,
to dance to us on the air.

Each note falls and fades,
replaced with another and again,
A steady stream of creation,
from your fingers pressing strings,
Fliting up and down the frets.
Pause commence and pause.

Now your instrument lies silent.
Lurking lonely in the corner.
It feels its being punished,
for its nature's denied by you.
Spending silent hours wondering,
What did it do wrong?, To earn
this intense displeasure and ill-favour.

Music once encased your soul.
Now a polished coffin holds your body.

Nimble fingers lie lifeless.
An ocean longs to have them flex,
and flit up and down its frets.
Playing to create your own elegy.
Electrified and synchronised,
accompanied with mourns and wails.
God, oh God. Why couldnt it have been someone else?

Raindrops sound plip plop landing on,
your new patterned polished home.
Heads down afraid to look around
and see the haunted eyes of your ocean.
Each assembled to say farwell, goodbye.

Long after the ocean dissapates,
nature still sings for whats been lost.
Raindrops sound plip plop drumming
its steady beat of loss on your prison,
on your patterned polished coffin.

A best friend still lies lonely in a corner.
Rejected dejected and forgotten.
It longs to pick itself up and play
its own eerie accompaniment to this, your last day.
©2003-2009 ~greendragon
:icongreendragon:

Author's Comments

My boyfriends friend commited suicide a little while back, and since then he's been trying to write a song for him, but he can never get it just right. I tried, and I dont think i understood what he really meant until i did try just now. its wrong. its all wrong.
For Séan.

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:iconnotrust:
This is so beautiful, I'm speechless, I'm so sorry for your loses :blackrose:

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"There is something in each of us that wants us to be Unhappy. It creates in our imaginations problems that don't yet exist- quite often causing them to come true."
~Benjamin Hoff The Te of Piglet
:icononic:
wow, so powerful, so meaningful. this is beautiful. +fav
:iconcrimsonmegatron:
The friend of a friend.
Present only now at the end.
I listen respectfully.
...
A perfect requiem.
I wish I had known him.
The girl's words are so sweet.
A pool of tears gather at my feet.
From the eyes of everyone who did.
Her voice is clearly affected.
But I feel, as she bravely carries on,
The loss of the friend she knew as Sé an.

I'm sorry Lauren. Really.

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The mark of the machine.

°jark is dA. | Find me at Farlow Studios
:iconaffirmation:
Yea you know. When actually faced with death, so many frivilous things seem so pointless. Why do we get so caught up with the darkness? Why do we dwell in it, and not move on?

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Oh show me the way to the next whiskey bar, oh don't ask why. Oh, don't ask why.
:icongreendragon:
thats very sweet. it genuinely means a lot. thank you D.

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:icondispositioned:
Very sad... I like the way you used the unused guitar in this, and gave it some feelings. Kinda like giving something inhuman some human qualities. The wording in this is also something that impressed me. Great work.:)

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'Wanting to be someone else is a waste of the person you are.'

CoHM
Critics of Hoarse Mentality
:icongearlock:
wow this is really deep... it has some kind of sad beauty
i'm really sorry for your loss, its really hard to deal with the death of someone really close to you...

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:iconmirabex:
"its steady beat of loss on your prison,
on your patterned polished coffin.

A best friend still lies lonely in a corner.
Rejected dejected and forgotten."

These lines are gold. together they're an emotionally impactual paragraph. As usual I read this aloud and they seemed together into a verse -I sighed in awe of the delectable sounds forming on my tongue.
well done.

bex.
:icongreendragon:
that is wonderful praise. im honoured

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